Received feedback for Assignment 2 from my tutor.
Thank you for your second Assignment
Thank you for taking my advice and keeping to the requirements of the course so that you have submitted only some evidence of the projects as instructed in the coursebook.
Feedback on assignment
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity
The work you have submitted for this assignment demonstrates an adequate standard for technical and visual skills, quality of outcome and creativity. I am aware that you are new to this approach to learning and that you will need a lot of advice in order to improve your technical and visual skills and your quality of outcome. It is particularly issues relating to technical and visual skills that need to be improved and I notice your comment in your blog about the spoon drawings as follows:
“This was starting to work in the reflections. It doesn’t look enough like a spoon though. Will try the front next. Value of the spoon relative to the stool is weak as well. In all, I need to consider the design of the overall piece in much more detail before starting a main assignment piece”.
The key statement here, which applies to all your spoon drawings is
“ It doesn’t look enough like a spoon though”
Well if it does not look like a spoon then the drawing is not working and you need to ask why. This is the key issue to making progress – ask questions and if something does not look right –act on it.
In this case the spoon does not look like a spoon because you have given no importance to the spoon – the form is weak – it is completely undermined by irrelevant details – the reflections have become more important than the spoon – the background has become more important than the spoon. The spoon does not have a physical presence. Look hard at the spoon and analyse what you are seeing – because you are not observing.
Please learn to tone down detail in favour of structure – the grain of the wood and the importance of the reflection are less important than the subject of the drawing – don’t make it more important – tone down the extraneous detail.
Study drawings by Morandi, Vuillard, Tiepolo, Sickert, Hockney’s (line drawings in particular) and look at the importance given to the subject and how they employ detail only where it is necessary. Work at your construction and refine it.
Your toilet roll studies and the cups on the table all suffer from problems relating to observation and construction.
Look at the toilet roll tubes –does the opening at the top of the standing roll look correct. Why is the opening slanting towards the viewer and where is the leading edge on that opening?
Surely if you really looked at the shape of that opening it would be an ellipse shape?
Does the tube lying down look like it is sitting on the table?
Why is the cast shadow so dark?
Is there a thin dark immediate shadow under the tube?
Do the cups/mugs look like you could pick them up and drink out of them?
Does the cup on the left look like it is sitting on the saucer?
Answer the above questions and take steps to improve the drawings by having another go.
Keep asking questions when you draw and if something does not look right ask your self why and try to correct it.
Learning Logs and Sketchbooks
Your sketchbook shows some improvement but you must use it as a way to improve what you are doing. The sketchbook is where you can tackle difficulties you are having with seeing and responding to what you see. It is where you can experiment, go wrong and even make a mess. It is your working visual journal. Work on your structural drawing , improve your observation of form – try to get the gist of something very quickly – restate and test your self.
Your learning log is improving and there is evidence of self –reflection but I would like to see a more evidence that you are responding to this self-reflection. Look at artworks to learn from them.
I have given you a number of artists to look at above. Please look at their work and respond to it in your blog.
Pointers for the next assignment
Some of these pointers will remain the same as in my previous report until I see that you are tackling them and progress is being made:
- Include context (background) in your drawings but do not make it more important than the subject
- Think about viewpoint
- Think about light variation on surface and phrasing
- Improve tonal range
- Be aware of light source
- Include immediate and cast shadows
- Provide evidence of research, discernment, self evaluation and contextual study in your logbook